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Writing Winning Essays Using Detailed Descriptions
Detailed descriptions include details that make admission officers
say, “I want to have this kid over for lunch” or ”I
want to have this kid in my class.” Your essays should
have solid details about the writing topic - the who, what, where and
when. For example, if during your volunteer activities, you buy
ice cream for your favorite elementary school student that you’re
tutoring, don’t say, “I buy ice cream for one of my students.” Instead,
make your essay come alive by writing, “About once a month I
treat Johnny to the local ice cream shop after our afternoon tutoring
session. Johnny is usually tired after our session but is always
excited to take a stroll to the 31 Flavors™ to get his favorite
mint chip ice cream cone. We talk along the way and we get to
know each other a little better each time we share some cold, tantalizing
ice cream. It is definitely a fun and rewarding outing, and I
think it helps me communicate with Johnny during our academic lessons.”
Winning essays involve the reader.
To write a “winning essay”, you can use:
Detailed descriptions.
Detailed step-by-step
actions leading to the significant event or thesis of your essay.
Conversations
with actual quotes from people in the conversation. |
